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Write on Wednesday… A Great One Liner

Write On Wednesdays Exercise 13 – A Great One Liner… This week you need to come up with one good line to describe a part of your day. It can be ‘real life’ or fiction. But it must tell us ‘who did what’. It has to be an amazing line, like a tiny little paper plane that must travel a big distance (figuratively speaking) with only a few folds … Every word in that line must earn its place, or be cut as excess baggage. Let’s get thinking about each sentence as though every word counts, like working one group of muscles to show how much weight they can carry.

Write on Wednesdays

Tinny carnival music played in my ears as I sat with my teeth grinding, on the ferris wheel, both of us wobbling slightly in the wind.

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8 Responses to Write on Wednesday… A Great One Liner

  1. Sif Anna Dal says:

    Love the image of you and Ferris wheel both wobbling in the wind! I can feel the tension and apprehension in this line!

  2. Kerry says:

    I can see the image in my mind, and feel your anxiety. Nice job.

  3. I felt every single emotion in that piece. The sights of the fair, the smells, the touch and the sounds. Really great!

    Anne xx

  4. Jayne says:

    I can also feel the wind & hear the music-very visceral

  5. Love it! Reminds me of the feeling of unease as the carts wobble. I have felt this way on ferris wheels as well.

  6. Tat says:

    Oh, I know the feeling. A very descriptive line, it;s amazing how much you can say in so few words.

  7. Naomi says:

    I felt ever little movement of that ferris wheel. Well done!

  8. Wonderful! You got across a lot of emotion and painted a real picture. You should be very pleased with this!

    Gill x

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